angienano ([info]angienano) wrote,
@ 2007-11-14 22:31:00
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Chunk 12
Very short chunk tonight -- my apologies but I was dashing around like mad today and I'm exhausted right now so I'm going to post what I've got and then go fall into bed. I'll be travelling tomorrow, going to visit my mom for Thanksgiving, so I have no idea whether tomorrow will be any better. In between my e-mail binging every eighty seconds today, I did some really great work with Alea so now I actually know where I'm going; once I have some more time to write and the energy to keep my eyes focused, I should be able to get some things done. So thanks to Alea, and thanks to the rest of you for your patience. {{{}}}



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His mouth opened several times, like a babe searching for a teat, until finally he managed to say, "Lady, I beg pardon, but what do we do?" The goddess turned and glared at him, despite the fact that she'd been staring right at him the entire time. He didn't know how it had happened, but only that it had.

The goddess sighed and took on an aspect of impatience. "Put down Baruno, little prince. He has horded power and bartered it into more, multiplying his influence on the mortal Earth like a moneylender redoubling his coin. He has accumulated enough to manifest upon a mortal, as I have upon this my servant.

"But Baruno remains. This is...." Ashti paused, as though searching for words. Perhaps she was puzzling out how to explain the unknowable affairs of the gods to a mere mortal, but Arden got the feeling that there was something she was reluctant to say.

"This is costly," is what she finally chose. "I cannot remain for long without expending a great deal of... of influence. I must leave soon. Baruno remains. He stays, inhabiting his mortal host continuously. Rather than influencing through dreams and portents, or even through commands, he controls directly. It focuses his influence, allowing him to make frugal use of what he has. And mark well, little prince -- what he has is more than any other god, enough to manifest four times over already, and still he craves more. He would starve us all and rule this world with his own hands."

"Who?" Arden dared to ask. "Who has he inhabited?"

"You can puzzle out whom he has already inhabited for yourself if you think on it. I will tell you something much more valuable -- that the one he seeks next is your emperor."

Arden felt a frigid shiver move up his spine, and while his shocked mind sorted through everything the goddess had piled on his shoulders, she reached out with two fingers and gently but firmly touched both his and Luka's eyes, simultaneously, in the impossible way of deities. She said, "Do not delay and do not fail" and then... left.

The priestess was herself once more, with smooth, pale skin over harsh features, her hair loose around her shoulders, and a body which seemed more a captive of the earth, and which clearly never did much walking despite the goddess she served.

Her eyes rolled up in her head and she pitched forward. Arden scrambled to catch her and the two younger priestesses hurried to her side. Their eyes were huge and round with shock and awe, but they lifted the older priestess up easily and carried her away without undue fuss.

Arden had wanted to ask more questions -- surely a priestess would know more, could fill in some of the gaps, pits, canyons in his knowledge of the gods and their workings -- but the three women had disappeared through a silk-draped arch and he dared not follow.

Besides, Ashti had specifically said they should not delay. Arden had never had much to do with the gods but disobeying a direct command from one didn't strike him as the act of a wise man, nor of one who wished to live a long and peaceful life.

Of course, his life wasn't likely to be either long or peaceful if he set out to thwart the motions of the most powerful god of the empire.

He turned to bid Luka follow him, but he stopped and stared. Luka was staring back at him. Their eyes met and they stared into each other for a handful of heartbeats.

Arden said, "Your eyes -- they glow."

Luka swallowed hard. "As do yours." He blinked and Arden blinked back at him. The glow remained.

"It's the touch of the goddess," Arden said. He looked around the room, a quick scan for anything which might appear different.

The statue of Ashti's eyes glowed too. So did one of the pins holding the shoulders of her gown together, and two of the gems in her sandals.

Luka said, "There," and pointed back toward the door they'd come in through. Arden looked and saw that there was a row of symbols glowing across the lintel.

"We can see things the goddess has touched," Luka whispered.

There was no one near to hear, but Arden whispered back, "Or made. Or written. That could be useful but I think we need to leave now." He headed for the door and Luka followed. He kept an eye on the writing on the lintel as he passed, part of him expecting it to flare or move or speak, but it only glowed and he was just as happy to have it so.



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[info]illuminated_sin
2007-11-15 08:25 am UTC (link)
Excellent! :D I'm still enthralled. And I'll allow you to travel and not annoy you TERRIBLY about the writing. Of course I'm greedy for this story and want more because it's wonderful, but I understand there's only so much time one can write when traveling and sleeping.

Hope you get back to it soon, though. ;)

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[info]angienano
2007-11-15 12:35 pm UTC (link)
Thanks, hon. I appreciate your forbearance. ;) This is why November is a really awful time for NaNoWriMo, but we do our best anyway.

Right now I'm about a thousand words ahead of where I was at this time last year, and I'm not trapped in the sucking pit of despair which is periodically my own brain, so I'm actually expecting [crossed fingers] to get at least some writing done while I'm up at Mom's, even if I can't catch up or maintain pace. I'm still ahead of last year, though, so things are cool. [hugz]

Angie

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[info]liriel1810
2007-11-15 08:28 am UTC (link)
That's an interesting turn of events! I wonder if they'll only be able to see things that Ashti has had contact with, or if they'll be able to see items that have been 'god touched' by other gods as well! That would certainly be helpful with the task they've been given.

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[info]angienano
2007-11-15 12:37 pm UTC (link)
That's an excellent question :) and I'm sure the boys will figure out the answer soon. Thanks, hon!

Angie

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[info]alea_nano
2007-11-15 08:35 am UTC (link)
ROFL! You got the glowing eyes in!

I can see from the opening paragraph why you were struggling to get anywhere when you weren't sure what they were supposed to do next. At least you are over that hump now, and can continue.

Thank you also for all the help you gave me and I hope that the travelling goes smoothly today and that you find some time to jot down bits of scenes, if not write 'properly'.

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[info]angienano
2007-11-15 12:40 pm UTC (link)
Hehe! I thought of a way to use it that wouldn't make everyone scream and run away and I just had to do it. ;)

And yeah, I actually had the first paragraph there, and the first two sentences of the second, yesterday. I wasn't about to post three and a half lines, though [facepalm] so I just said screw it and saved it. Now that I'm over that hump -- and I definitely am, yay! -- the next bit should come pretty easily. [crossed fingers]

You're very welcome and thanks back. :D

Angie

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[info]alea_nano
2007-11-15 06:53 pm UTC (link)
I like it, much better than my original example. And I'm interested to see where you are going with the seeing-goddess's-touch idea.

Hope it continues to go well and that you got some scribbling done while travelling (although not if you were driving, that would be dangerous :P) I was out shopping today and I sat in a coffee shop and plotted out my next 10k or so. Now I just have to write them. I also treated myself to a new shiny notebook for longhand because I'm going to visit a friend this weekend and won't have the laptop with me. And because I'm a sucker for pretty notebooks (http://www.paperblanks.com/old_leather/oldleatherwraps.htm - it's "handtooled" the fifth one down. It has a magnetic strip that flips over and protects the pages so I can carry it in my handbag).

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[info]angienano
2007-11-15 07:00 pm UTC (link)
I'm still at home, actually -- it's only about five to eleven in the morning, and my shuttle to the airport isn't due till almost three in the afternoon. And in fact, I've neither packed nor showered and dressed yet. [cough]

I haven't done any actual writing yet today, but I might at the airport. I've never flown Delta before so I have no idea what their check-in and security line is usually like. With any luck it'll go very quickly [crossed fingers] and I'll have lots of time to sit at the gate and write. After that, no clue; it depends what Mom wants to do.

That's a cool notebook. :) I see a lot of really gorgeous notebooks similar to that at SF conventions, but I can't stand writing more than a shopping list in longhand anymore so I never buy any. [wry smile] I hope you get a lot done this weekend, though; I'll be looking forward to seeing what you post on Monday. :D

Angie

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[info]alea_nano
2007-11-15 07:12 pm UTC (link)
Ah the magic of time zones. It's 7pm here and I haven't started yet (I really need to get into the habit of doing a bit in the morning, because sitting down and attempting to do 5k now, while possible, requires a lot of strong will not to be distracted. If I do 1.5k in the morning, then a bit after lunch, then I only have 2k left by this point in the day and I might actually manage that kind of a wordcount.

I can't remember the last time I flew Delta, so that's no help. Singapore Airlines is the best I've ever flown with, but everyone varies day to day anyway. How long is the flight?

I like writing longhand for everything except the typing up afterwards! I like the feel of the process, especially if I'm stuck. Sometimes I just write one scene longhand to get myself going again - I always have a pad to hand for if I'm sitting somewhere waiting or whatever. I also live in a beautiful part of the world and sometimes go out and write sitting on the side of a mountain or something, and taking the laptop is too much trouble. Realistically I could take it this weekend - I have a 5 hour train journey there and then back again, so maybe I will. But the other thing I like about writing longhand is that I have no wordcounter, so I just keep writing, without checking every five paragraphs if that's another 500 words yet :)

My sister is on a facebook group called something like "Yes, hitting the word count checker does make the wordcount go up!" which is referring to her essays, but I think it may apply to nano too! It's a bad habit and I wish I could get rid of it.

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[info]angienano
2007-11-15 07:19 pm UTC (link)
I tend to do most of my writing in the evening, too. I'm very deadline-oriented (which is why NaNo is a great kick in the pants for me) so if I start at 10pm or so, it's easier to focus. If I do a bit earlier, though, then yeah, it's definitely easier to stay on track. Especially if I end up where I was last year, where I have to do 4-5K each day to catch up during the last week. [laugh/flail] Hopefully it won't quite come to that, though. But then again, there's that deadline thing. [headdesk] Hey, whatever works.

It's only a little over an hour flight, so once we're in the air it's not bad. Different terminals have different security efficiencies, though, or maybe it just seems so. It's the getting in and settled that I'm really not looking forward to. :/

The best airline I've ever flown was Lufthansa, when we went to Florence in March. The seats were too narrow, but then they always are for me and I imagine most people are fine. Other than that, though, the service was really wonderful, especially on the way back when our little hop from Florence to Munich was over two hours late and we were sure we were going to miss our connecting flight. Lufthansa isn't really an option between LA and Reno, though. :)

I sort of like the wordcount thingy. [duck] It can be frustrating when I'm stuck and barely squeezing out a sentence here and there, but then when I'm stuck I'm frustrated anyway, so.... :P

Angie, going off to take a shower

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[info]alea_nano
2007-11-15 07:29 pm UTC (link)
I'm awful - the closer I get to a deadline the harder I find it to write! You'd thing that I'd have learned, given my choice of degree discipline and structure of degree, but no. But I have learned what I can make myself do, which means I can work backwards from there. I really ought to be doing 5k a day at the moment, but I'm not really managing that. I'm 10k behind (half-way day today: eeek!) and while that does spread out pretty easily, I don't want it all to pile up at the end of the month.

I've never flown Lufthansa. My main reason for liking Singapore Airlines is that I could get up and walk after a 19hr flight and didn't feel completely dead and achy. And the fact that it took us under 15 minutes from the plane wheels hitting the runway to us leaving the airport. I was very impressed by that! Singapore Airlines isn't much use for travelling routes I use more often though. American I've used the most recently, and they are fine usually. I had a chaotic flight with an Ecuadorian company where the ticket had the wrong flight time, so we were delayed a day, which meant we couldn't make our connection, or our later international flight the next day. But the chance that you'll be flying Aerogal any time soon seems unlikely :) And it did all work out in the end: our bags made it and everything!

The wordcount thing can make me feel guilty. For example I have written 202 words between this comment and the previous. Both comments are longer than that!

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[info]angienano
2007-11-15 08:05 pm UTC (link)
Both comments are longer than that!

See, that's me too. I have absolutely no problem cranking out five hundred or a thousand words in a journal or blog comment. Often my comments are longer than the original post. [duck] I think it's because it's more direct. I mean, you want to be well organized and express yourself clearly, but there's less to keep track of and what's necessary is more natural and takes less thought, at least for me. Fiction is more fun but harder.

Angie

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