angienano ([info]angienano) wrote,
@ 2007-11-05 00:11:00
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Chunk 4
A little ahead yesterday, a little behind today. I might be getting close to the end of Chapter One, though, so that's good. :)

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Roscha nodded. "Makes sense I suppose." He shrugged and worked on gnawing off a corner of his bread.

They sat in the sun and ate. The meager meal always quieted the boys down for a few minutes, but they were boys and soon the younger ones were finished eating and chasing each other about the yard. Luka could see that they were neither as quick nor as nimble as they'd been, that the jumps over the water trough to one side were both fewer and lower than before, but the ones swarming around playing -- the littler ones who had between seven and ten or so years -- could forget the rest of the world. Or at least set it aside for a while.

Roscha leaned over so his shoulder bumped Luka's and pointed to a couple of students scrambling up the rough-finished stone toward the catwalk over the gate, ignoring the wooden ladder. "Are they supposed to be doing that?"

Luka felt the warmth of solid muscle pressing against him and remembered staring at those shoulders the night before. He shifted away a little and said, "Not really but they do anyway. I only thrash them for it if they fall."

A snort answered him. "You're definitely a teacher." Roscha grinned at him. His eyes were grey and bright with humor, and the sun-weathered skin beside them crinkled when he smiled.

Luka stood looked around for Tochi, perhaps a bit more urgently than usual. "I have to go to work," he said without looking at Roscha. "You're welcome to watch if you like."

Of course he was -- what, was he going to send the man inside and instruct him not to look out for the rest of the afternoon? He spotted Tochi talking to one of the youngsters and called his name, then tilted his head toward the open area where they sparred.

Tochi nodded and trotted off for the practice swords. By the time he came back, Luka had stripped off his shirt and loosened up a little, although he still felt a tight awareness of their guest. A quick look over his shoulder showed him that Roscha had shifted over to the shade, but was otherwise still sitting on the ground watching, an open, curious expression on his face.

He's a sheep man, Luka reminded himself. He's probably never seen warriors working, not up close. Of course he's curious.

He took his long wooden swords from Tochi. They were polished blackwood, hard and worn, the same swords his father had used. His hands fit the grips without thought, as though the weapons simply extended his arms. He knew exactly where they were, where the edges and points were, at all times, the same way he knew where his own hands and feet were.

Tochi took a stance, one sword held across his chest and the other poised over his shoulder, and waited. Luka nodded, then just attacked without taking a ready position first.

Their swords whirled and swung and rebounded, crack-crack-kacrack. Luka and Tochi both attacked and parry with either sword from instant to instant, circling each other in a cyclone of wood that could and often did crack bones and leave deep bruises.

Luka was aware of the other students watching but he knew they'd stay out of the way, out of respect for both the combatants and the weapons. Beyond that, though, he was aware of a pair of curious grey eyes on him, watching him. He became self-conscious of his body and his movements, of his lack of a shirt even though he always practiced without one when the weather was this hot, and those eyes in the shadow against the wall drew more of his attention until he was hard-pressed to focus on Tochi.

Tochi grinned at him through gritted teeth and went on the offensive.

Luka had collected a bruise on his thigh, another on his upper arm, and a whipping cut across the shoulder where Tochi'd sliced him with the sharp wooden tip of one blade, and had given only a hard crack to the ribs in return. He wondered whether Roscha was watching how his muscles moved, then wrenched his attention back to the fight.

If it were Tochi whose mind was wandering like that, he'd have beaten him into the ground as a lesson. Distraction killed and Luka well knew it.

His pride was saved a similar lesson when one of the boys over the gate called, "Master? There's a mob coming!"

Luka disengaged and stepped back, swords at guard until he was sure Tochi had withdrawn as well, then paused to listen. The low rumble of voices echoed over the wall, along with the occasional shouted oath. He tossed his swords to Tochi and trotted over to the wall and up the ladder. He'd hoped the boy on watch was mistaken, or that the approaching crowd would pass by, but the shouting got louder when he looked over the parapet.

Someone called his name and he searched the crowd. Of course, Halvic the smith scowled up at him.



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[info]liriel1810
2007-11-05 08:34 am UTC (link)
Kinda hard to focus on your swordwork when you've got the eyes of a man you're interested in watching you. Luka knows it's not something he can do anything about, but he's already noticed how well build Roscha is, he can't stop his inner self from its awareness of Roscha. Hope he can get that under control if he needs to fight for real when Roscha's around!

Uh oh, the return of the mob doesn't bode well for Roscha OR Luka!

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[info]angienano
2007-11-05 08:37 am UTC (link)
Yes, it's one of those things he's pretty sure he should be able to suppress, but for some reason it's just not working. :D

And no, the returning mob probably isn't going to be much fun. Although the property is pretty defensible. :/

Thanks!

Angie

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[info]alea_nano
2007-11-05 10:01 am UTC (link)
ROWR. I'm drooling at the thought of Luka and Tochi's training. And I think Roscha isn't immune to similar ideas :P I like Luka telling himself Roscha is only watching because he is used to watching sheep. That's probably partly true...

The mob coming back isn't good. I'm glad Luka has plenty of food and a building he can defend.

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[info]angienano
2007-11-05 10:34 am UTC (link)
I love watching martial artists, mostly empty handed but swords are incredibly cool too. The Florentine fighters in the SCA were incredibly cool. :D

And right, the only reason Roscha is watching Luka practice is because he's never seen a swordfight close up before. [nod, nod, straight face]

And no, that's not good. Although Luka's not really all that worried yet. [crossed fingers]

In all seriousness, it's not going to be a huge deal and it's one of those things I'm sort of iffy about. :/ I need to wrap this chapter up as fast as I can and because I need to do a change of place and POV for Chapter Two, as well as a significant time jump. Chapter One is mostly establishing the characters, the setting, and the major events (war, seige) and then the "real" part of the story starts in the next chapter. I'm getting a bit bogged down here, though, and I'm afraid it's likely to get too long before I can wrap. [chewing fingernail] We'll see. I might end up just cutting out the whole mob-attack, if this chapter ends up too long.

For now, though, it's good for NaNo count, heh. :)

Angie

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[info]alea_nano
2007-11-05 10:39 am UTC (link)
Yep, Roscha's not watching Luka's muscles move at all. He's not remotely interested.

If you want to wrap up this section, then go for it. There's no reason the arrival of the mob necessarily has to lead to a prolonged seige or even much of a fight. And if you change your mind later you can always come back and write one after the end of nano.

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[info]angienano
2007-11-05 10:44 am UTC (link)
Nope. Not interested at all in the fluid play of muscle or the sweat glistening in the sun. Not even a teensy bit.

And yeah, that's what I was thinking I'd do. And I probably will. But because of where I ended (and that's just where I was at midnight :P ) I have a feeling people are expecting something Big, just because. Oh, well. It's NaNo and we all have our disappointments. [wry smile] But yeah, Luka can probably wrap this up pretty quickly, 'cause hey, basic gang of shopkeepers and craftsmen that Halvic worked up and hauled out here. A real mob (bigger and angrier) can be dangerous, and there are more dangerous mobs in the city, but these dudes just aren't that enthused. Which means maybe I should cut it, I don't know. :/

We'll see. I'm doing more Flist right now but when I get back to writing I'll see how it unfolds and whether I need to get out my shears. [nod]

Angie

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[info]illiadri
2007-11-05 09:37 pm UTC (link)
Angie my darling,

My RL is exploding and I have not been able to read your no doubt rather smashing work in progress. I know part of the condition of signing up to your nano journal was to give you feedback and encouragement, which I am singularly failing at. I thought perhaps I should withdraw from the journal and then read it later when I can find time to, you know, breathe and stuff. So I thought I should explain before I de-friended. I'm only doing so because I know I'm not holding my end of the bargain up :(

I'm so pleased you've been posting every day, and I'm completely rooting for you over here!

*hugs*

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[info]angienano
2007-11-05 10:27 pm UTC (link)
Oh, good grief. [hugz] You know, there are plenty of people friended to this journal who aren't commenting. I don't know if they're not reading or just have nothing to say -- I don't mind either way. I love comments of course :) but if you don't have time right now, that's fine. Come back whenever and comment when you have time. Don't sweat it, seriously. {{}}

Angie

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[info]sarkka2
2007-11-05 10:52 pm UTC (link)
This setting is very interesting. This chapter is the best IMO so far. Maybe because the phase is slower and we get to dwell with the characters.

I like the way these two ogle each other "discreetly" ;)


((((pssss. I stumbled on your last year nano and just had to read that too =D
and now I'm dying to hear is that story complete somewhere ???)

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[info]angienano
2007-11-06 10:24 am UTC (link)
Yes, they definitely need to be discreet in this culture. There seems to be an attraction there, though, despite the possible repercussions. :) I'm glad you're enjoying it.

And no, unfortunately I never did go back and do anything with last year's story. :/ I haven't given up on it, but I was pushing so hard and with so little foundation, I constantly felt like I was about to crash and burn with it. I do like what's there, but when I'm ready to do something with it, I'm going to have to go back and put in that foundation, on both the worldbuilding and the plot itself. I'm probably going to have to just rewrite it from the beginning, once I've got that foundation in place. No timeframe for this one. :( I'm glad you enjoyed what was there, though. [hugz]

Angie

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[info]maculategiraffe
2007-11-06 01:12 pm UTC (link)
Just wanted to say I'm really enjoying this story so far. The characterization and the budding attraction between the two men is particularly well handled, I think. Enjoying this and looking forward to more. :)

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[info]angienano
2007-11-06 01:19 pm UTC (link)
Thanks, hon. :) Nothing today (I spent most of it either asleep or awake-but-exhausted) but more tomorrow. [hugz]

Angie

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[info]foxrafer
2007-11-08 07:34 pm UTC (link)
I kind of like seeing Luka a little flustered. I'm sure he's deadly in battle (and we'll probably see some of that later in the story) but it's great to see this human side of him as well. I wonder how much it would take for him to be convinced he'll be safe if they act on what seems to be a mutual attraction. *g* I'm wondering if Roscha has to fight alongside the others against this mob if he'll give something away about his background. Even if that's not the direction this is going, how they handle this situation will be interesting.

And on an unrelated note, what in the world were you doing up at like 3 or 4 am? :-) It just struck me that you were responding to me when it wasn't even 7 here.

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[info]angienano
2007-11-09 08:11 am UTC (link)
Isn't he cute like that? ;) Of course, he'd probably slice my ears off if he heard me say that, but still. [innocent humming]

And I really don't have a regular sleep schedule. :P I'm awake when I'm awake and sleep when I'm tired and efforts to force myself into a "normal" schedule never last for more than a week or so. It's just something I live with. :)

Angie

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[info]illuminated_sin
2007-11-09 12:48 pm UTC (link)
Hee! He had teh sexxx on the brain and got distracted while fighting. XD Someone needs to get laid. :D

And of COURSE there's a mob at the door! Like they could leave THAT alone. :P

I'm slowly catching up on your story. Still behind, but still enjoying it, so I suppose that's a good thing! :)

Keep at it, Angie! You're doing fine!

::hugs::

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[info]angienano
2007-11-09 12:53 pm UTC (link)
Poor guy's gonna get skewered one of these times -- or at least some good bruises -- if he doesn't learn to focus. :D

Thanks, hon! [hugz]

Angie

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